Love lenny lyrics
I am working on expanding Love, Lenny Halliday and I wanted some help with the lyrics. I thought sj, ec, dk (or anyone who felt compelled) might do me the favor of making a few improvements as they saw fit. I'm working with a pretty fixed melody, so syllables and emphasis should probably stay close to the way this scans. the verses are a waltz (emphasis alternates except for a triplet in the second lines: "sleep here for", "other some"), the chorus follows the melody of the demo linked above. i'll try to post one for the verse melody as well to make this less abstract.
i tried to use bits from em's lenny halliday story, bits from the anagram poems we wrote, and a few passing references to the secret passerines mythology. i like bits of it. ferris wheel reference. i like the bridge and the last chorus pretty well. the verses draw heavily on the lenny letter and don't have as much resonance as i'd like. i mean, i know this song is going to be an inside joke, but i'd like it to be a touching one, if possible.
lyric ideas
i melted the ice oh i had been asleep here for weeks now i tried to resign myself but switzerland remains the money that i've sent should pay the fare dear passerines hold tightly to the rail the seasons rise and fall before your eyes the ferris wheel turns slowly through the sky people may not like you sweethearts buy each other some candy i would tunnel underneath the sea to bring you back i shouldn't let you go but how else is the world to change? earth spins, see? earth spins, see? i wonder at the places you left prints your steady hands no less for being small send Hope my love and Chance the rest she craves my heart became a bird and flew away
structure
vrs, chr, vrs, bdg, chr